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Out of this World [Feb. Contest]

Releasing horses of imagination,
I raced to worlds I dreamt of travelling to-
where stars are born of fire inflammation
to console the darkness, "I'm here for you."

Some young, some old, some anxious to be born
a galaxy furnished the milky way.
In timeless laps and amazing flown,
the elegant content shaped up my day.

The fairies took me aboard the cloud,
a ride along where planets run,
Just like a baby I cried out aloud,
"that really was a miraculous fun."

Now descending from the alien's cocoon,
I promised to come back sooner than soon.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Not an easy subject for someone who didn't put a pen on a paper for more than a year now. I tried out my favorite form " the sonnet". I might have failed to get a good volta, but I am happy I could participate with my friends and enter something for Feb. Contest. Thanks to Raj.
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Comments

This is a winner no matter what, it is exciting, and has a great flow with a story in there.
Good luck though you wont need it for the competition,
Yours as always Ian..xx

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author comment

A good come back poem. A little too late for the February Contest but I am sure imust have helped you get the rust off your poetic tools.. Thanks for posting it....

Regards...

raj (sublime_ocean)

dear Raj
Believe me, I've just known it's Mar.
I think the judges forgot to conclude the contest so I was able to enter my poem though time is over.
What really counts is the participation, doesn't it?
I really can't thank you enough. Highly appreciate it.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Yes. Participation counts. Stan the good man had reminded that contest closes on 25th Feb

Best wishes for the next contest..

raj (sublime_ocean)

be more connected to things at Neo. If only I have tme.
Thank you again!
Regards

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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