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Orgy

Fifth December Victoria station
Both of us watching 2 lesbians
Clutching each other
Unconscious to the world.
You looked at me and said
"I need love"

I crossed the road
A single look said he's attractive .
The moment drove me to hug a tall stranger
Who immediately stuck his tongue down my throat and said
when I didn't,t respond,
tongue neutral cradled in my mouth
fighting off the bacteria
brought in from your experiences,
wife, lover, foreign zippers and underwear
"would you like to go to an orgy?"

Publicly pinned to the wall of the " slug and lettuce"
your hardness pressed against my groin,
breasts flattened,
your hand roaming.
You didn't know my name,my age or who I was
I was just another genital
for the naked roomful of bodies at Kentish town.
Should I have said yes and followed you?

Instead I said
"So sorry. A Classical music concert awaits me"
Torn between the forbidden pleasures never experienced,
And the now , suddenly mundane, "la traviata"
I did however take your phone number.
I lie here,cocooned in warmth, thinking
Life decision. Should I call?

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Nary a truer word spoken

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Thank you mark. I read all about you. All manic depression is , is a brain wired differently, so differently it makes your poems special. Good wishes
French

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no, not in the stereotypical men getting turned on by girl on girl action, as a free expression of love.

The next two stanzas grossed me out.

The final stanza made a poem.

Have I mis-read you?

cheers,
Jess
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What does grossed you out mean?
Disgust? Excitement? Interest? Revulsion? Or just the feeling she could have done better?Love the way you say cheers . Is that an Australianism?
Frenchf

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in fact I think It's an American virus, seem to first remember hearing it on Valley Girl.

Which is pertinent. There is a certain pressiness in my response that embarrass me. Then again some of my fantasies might well disturb you.I was trying to say it went beyond my "comfort zones". But then again they haven't yet found a unit either small enough or big enough to measure my comfort zones.

cheers,
Jess
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