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Operation

At three o’clock, malt whisky (ten years old),
Napoleon brandy follows (warm and gentle),
to ease away concern a mind may hold,
about the planned assault upon “God’s temple.”

An apogee to years of aggravation
(a body racked by rampant throbs and aches);
four different ailments blend to cause frustration,
while giddiness, fatigue are nature’s brakes.

What lies ahead, is long and lingering pain,
the road sign-posted, death just round the bend;
no trace of fear but numbness in the brain,
the Reaper nearly welcomed as a friend.

The killer can be cancelled at a stroke,
then other treatments tested over time;
let surgeons try to lift the heavy yoke,
to hesitate prolongs the pantomime.

They pry apart the bars that guard the chest
and cut their way around the beating heart,
then bind with steel a bruised and broken breast
and wheel me out when happy with their part.

There is no cure for rheumatoid arthritis,
psoriasis, or even sinusitis;
but “lords of life” embark with dedication,
perform a double bypass operation.

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Mr. Logan. Seems you had to face too much pain before and after. I had a severe heart attack myself at the age of 37 that followed a caesarean, but thank Allah never a bypass.

It's good to know you could overcome the crisis that Mr. Snow is going through these days... I bet it isn't an easy experience.

PS . I assume the change of the rhyme scheme in the last stanza is intentional.
Thanks for sharing.

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I don't know whether it had the desired effect. From the two comments it has evinced I have my doubts. It was supposed to emphasise the meaning.

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It shows I haven't a critic of real value? I guess
The poem is too powerful even to think of any worthy suggestion for improvement.

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Definitely puts my problems into perspective! This poem certainly does have an emotional impact - I winced and audibly ohh ed. The fifth stanza is particularly graphic and honest in it's description of surgery to the heart - the mental image it invokes is powerful, releasing absolute horror, sympathy and hope for those who go through such an operation. ( which I assume you have - though I've been told "assumption is the mother of all bugger ups". )

You are a very talented poet Keith - as Rula says was the rhyming pattern change in the last stanza intentional?

Love Mand xxx

Great poem

Love Mand xxxx

in this particular is correct. It was an enormous relief as I had been housebound the best part of a year awaiting my turn. Five days after the operation I was climbing a bing at the rear of my house to drink in a beautiful dawn.

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