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Only A Hint

flavored water
is the sexiest of drinks
like a person in just
their underwear

laced
with lemons
or silky
strawberries

a strap of
earl grey tea
only a hint
of clothing

like the human form
water
doesn't need much
to taste
full bodied

& sweet

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I did enjoy your imagery and connection of water with the sensuous human form and you presented some sweet associations there. The rhythm and meter threw me off-point a bit. It might be beneficial to tighten that up. I think it's an unusual and fun subject to work with.

Respectfully,

~ Marthalyn

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