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One Day...

One day you will leave,
The places that dont let you breath,
One day you will ask,
Where the hell's my mask,
Don't hide your face,
Because one day you will leave this place

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
one day, into a week, into a month, into a year. one day is a long time.
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