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ode to a rose that grew from concrete
tupac liked to talk of
a rose that grew from concrete
i like the idea
though now obsolete
i understand being a rose
emerging in concrete
though his version of it
takes the cake
being a fragile thing
in a concrete jungle
i understand the pain
so tupac can be the rose
the one grown from concrete
i'd like to be a peony
big and bold
the one who broke the
concrete
-the peony who broke the concrete
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
themoonman
Sun, 2019-06-30 07:35
Hi,
I like the idea, I think you give too
much away with the title and your
poem seems to be missing it's music
or flow of ease. Read it out loud is the
test.
Cool images!