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I am disconnected, a broken circuit...
With no light behind my eyes.
This apathy has made me certain,
Of where our untrodden path now lies.

Once normal glances turned suspicious,
Gazes avoided, emotions slide.
Attacks of isolation vicious,
I search for an abstract place to hide.

But these fleeing feet they find no refuge,
For my shield is now what shuts me out.
I do my best to try to reach you
But I cannot breach your wall of doubt.

My hands grope for a course of action
But I cannot see the steps to take,
As every word is weighed with reaction
This path outlined with my mistake.

Blood cannot purchase my atonement,
Otherwise, I would be bled dry;
For Mercy seems to be absent
Or indifferent to my cry.

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Excellent poem, Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I second what Roscoe has said.
Did you ever escape from that situation or was it just being stubborn lol.
Great to see you here writing, Take care,
Yours as always, Ian xx

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I love the flow of this and it really seems to hit me with it subject matter in my life right now. Excellent poem. Thank you for sharing.

excellent word use....
the mth like placement of writing is
excruciatingly good!

thank U

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