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O friend

O My Friend

We walk along side a river
see the waters flow silently
many friends
come and go
but the river
continues to flow.
then you hear
a call,
do not mindlessly walk,
the edges are sandy
all bends are deceptive
if one does not know,
one may drown
you are a stranger
out of town
but do come along
yet take me not wrong
friend I am only
only for a while,
as the river
enters the ocean
I surely will say
good bye
till then do abide
enjoy your stride...
side by side
ere the tide
does subside!

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Free verse
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There is a friend sticking closer than a brother! You have captured the essence of that - with all it's twists and turns, dangers and joys.

One little typo ( unless you meant to do it for emphasis )

yet take me not wrong
friend I am only ( only is used twice - did you mean to do it? )
only for a while,
as the river

Very well done Lovedly! :)

Love Mand xxxx

first only= friend
second only= time wise in essence
may be do reread
perhaps a small , may do shall if u say so

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I see what you mean! :)

glad u do thanks

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