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Nothing But Alien

I'm nothing but alien
coming down to earth
was nothing like you ever since
birth.

I'm stronger than you in every way
so pray to your Lord that I'm not
here to stay.

Yes I know I look just like you
but there are some things that
are more than new.

There is peace in my planet above.
Peace that you can never imagine,
peace that you can only dream of.

My alien nature is fine as can be
but when you frighten me then you
will see.

That I am nothing like you I'm violent
as well . I'm more violent than you could
ever be so hold your breath and count 1,2,3.

I'm friendly, insane and even a demonic
mess with my planet and I'll see you
demolished.

There is something in me that can't be
contained. Something I know that would
rot your puny human brain.

There is something more to life than
knowledge and stuff something
to make you happy something to
lift you up.

So come with me and take my
hand to my far away happy alien land.
When we get there you will see
that alien life is where you want to be.

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about the title. Your language use is fine, the rhythm is alright until you reach the sixth stanza, where it starts to unravel and become a rant! That's okay, I think it becomes a bit more of a warning that you are about to become their worst nightmare. ~ Geezer.
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