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Nervous System

do something that scares you
tell the story
sing the song

there is a thrill
to doing
as well as being

and not just breathing

there is a time
to count your breaths
and your blessings
to let your thoughts
pass like a movie
on the screen
of your mind

but what if you never
actively visualized
yourself winning
the boxing match
the big award
the lover?

let your passions
send you
from tree
to ground
to sky
like the bird
with its fluttering

be nervous
but don't let your
nervous system

with all of its

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there is mutual connectivity between each lines. You never halted the rhythm of the poem. It runs from beginning to end and that creates pure originality of poetic thought.

Onyinyechi Cosmos

Thanks Jackweb!

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