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Nature's Crown

Awakened by the rains of spring
The flowers bloom to woo the bees,
The wrens build nests and then they sing.
Awakened by the rains of spring
The daisies braided in a ring,
A child’s bright laugh rides on the breeze.
Awakened by the rains of spring
The flowers bloom to woo the bees.

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This is one of the better efforts in this very tired, restrictive form.

Keith Logan
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Thanks, Keith. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I'm not much for restricted forms, but I thought I'd give it a go.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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Good triolet
is it missing the toy?
I wasn't sure if all three themes had to be included. ...

Good rhythm and rhyme
best of luck in the contest
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I thought a daisy chain could be considered a toy - a floral crown used by little princesses everywhere. ;-)

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I'm often a bit thick - missed that
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Since you first mentioned it I've been thinking that I may need to reword that line to clarify it a bit.

It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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I like this, it has a lovely sunny feel to it - full of hope and good things to come. Jx

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I think reading anything about Spring lifts the spirits. So I have to say I liked this one.
Thanks for sharing.

PS. I haven't include the three themes in my triolet and no one mentioned anything about it. Maybe no one thought it's a winner anyway lol :)

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I didn't mention it to you as I wasn't sure really what the rule is - I'm still not sure
I only mentioned it to Blue as I saw she'd used two, and I wondered if I'd missed one - which I had lol
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I dont write constructed form
but do have a love of reading it
this is very delightful
and refreshing

thank U!

This can only be the Blue of the Bluebell as it heralds the Spring, so does this , lovely write.
Even this old man made daisy chains when a young child, they adorned others as necklaces or as tiaras for princesses a very fresh Spring this is..
Yours as always, Ian..xx

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