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Myth, Fairytale or Reality? (re-write II)

When the final curtain falls upon my eyes
while the Gods haggling sounds like barks
and winged creatures do battle high above
for whom will obtain my life’s spark
as I return to the great void
to see where I will be deployed

While few who walk upon the soil
Speak my name
as darkness deepens in my brain
and deaths winter overtakes paralyzing all my ends
then the screen of life runs in reverse
before me I see all my turns and bends
have I let myself be sub-versed

Those above who play their games
with creatures that they love and hate
names are dragged like counterclaims
which even Santa Claus can’t imitate
then coins are taken on the River Styx
while minions wait upon the rivers freight
the Gods just laugh and have their kicks

Here on earth I’ve lived in one big mess
wondering what is life or what is death
has this been just a mind test
while hearing laughter echoing all around
almost like a rib splitting sound
and those in power sit there looking down
as if seeing a garden that has gone a ground

Yet the faithful say;
“There must be adoration!”
but of what, something I can’t hear or see
how can I praise something that plays games with me
why so many rules
or is it just the gods being cruel
while we live in a world filled with strife
and struggle every day to live a good life

Those I love drop like flies
again the faithful say; “God took them”
or did they go straight to hell
when really all there is, is the final sleep
there is no Heaven or Fiery pit
only worms that eat and eat
but yet they say; have faith and take the leap

Does anyone really know?
I have not met one that has reported back
for me it’s all anxiety
can someone tell me, Please!
Is it Myth, Fairytale, or what I see as Reality?

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Free verse
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Last few words: 
For me this is the great universal question, there is no answer just my own perception.
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How have you been?

You are right, it's the universal question that I believe
even the faithful find themselves asking from time to
time.

I liked your poem, critical thinking is what it is and there
is never anything wrong with that. We should question
everything until we are at least somewhat sure.

There are places where the poem flows well but then the
flow drifts, you could always work on it later to get that part
worked out or not. I believe what was important to you was
getting the words out and I can definitely relate.

good to see you here man,

Richard

I have been writing this for a long time at lease two years, I am trying to find the right flow in those areas that it is loss. without losing the climatic implications of the write. There has been a metamorphic slow change to it as I find the words to hold true to my statement but keeping the flow is arduous. I know that as I keep writing it will come to me. thank you for your honest opinion, it is appreciated!

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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We all believe so many things of after and the now.
As I say if there is no after life then I will not worry.
Yet we all have a place to go that is held in our own ways
Is it a memory or a fact that we need to believe in these things.
Over the years of talking to the children and the teachers
Where ever they are or whoever they are, it is a constant for me.
There are no people you can tell of anything as we are so different.
An excellent write, though it is one great question, as long as you have been to all, as you would be to yourself, then you need not fear anything that may follow.
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

are we just kidding ourselves by thinking there is something out there that is helping us, or is it just the choices we make. maybe perchance it is just being at the right place at the opportune time.
that is how I see it.
thanks for your input as always, these are just thoughts and how I live.

Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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I have recorded audio of others from where I believe, but that is for me and not for changing others perception of other places, be they of the Spirit or what.
I believe in them after 250 hours of talking to them all on tape so that is that.
I am a very loose spiritualist in that my wife is an international Medium and many things that have coloured my belief.
I write of these things, but as an example, not for others to change (not for me to do).
How do you explain things that have been told to you mostly by a Spirit being or their teachers, it is not for me to say.
On my site where I dump most of my work in the Spiritual section are some of the talks and things shown to me where I have transposed a few of the tapes, in Sadie's Diaries category (yenti.co.uk) this is where I put all of my writing for my family so they can read and do what they will with later.
Eddie I have helpers and others around me, but that is my belief.
It is up to the individual to understand and seek out truths of their own.
I will always talk of these things when asked, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

To many reasons (to escape reality) and no real concrete explanation, so I will continue on my road that brings peace for me as yours for you...

Cheers,
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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I know how critical it is when we start talking about our and others beliefs. I lately had a long blog about it and it could have been ended much worse than it did. Each is clinging to his own opinion and what he believes and most often than not goes in the same empty circle.
Your questions are all legal. At least you are searching. I can't but wish you the best of luck and the comfort regardless of what might your last findings be.
A powerful write there.

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There is no quest for me I have done my search for 40yrs. My answer at the end is that I have my reality, which lives in fact and not in faith. I am not changing in ones mind it is just the way I have come to see it. I absolutely respect what others believe. There is one thing that I have learned which is a constant in all religion. The greatest gift God gave them all was choice!

This is my answer, but for everyone else it is the question I pose.
Is it Myth, Fairytale, or what I see as Reality?

Thanks for the visit and the heart felt comment,
Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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