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My Sweet Home (Effective Con. Pastoral Poetry WS) Rula, Ian, Wesley

It's not that big...my home I mean,
but it's as sweet as honey could call.
When children's noise goes loud that brings
such calmness, love and peace to my soul.

No matter where our surroundings are
My heart and love will always be
Abiding in a country strange or far
Or where my parents love taught me.

No region, state is large enough
to hold the love of my small land.
Compassion and cacophony
I love my mad cap home

1. Rula
2. Ian
3. Wesley Snow

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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A collaborative work for "Effective Pastoral Poetry" workshop
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I think that this was a good one to be part of and thank you for the opportunity to write with you, Yours as always, Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

dear Ian.
I always looked for a collaborative writing.
I think we should thank Stan for giving such an apportunity.
Thank you boss.

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this blends well guys
a homey read - leaves one feeling mellow

awesome how all the collaborative writes turned out
we should all be happy with ourselves i reckon
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

aren't we?
Thank you. I am happy you like it.
Yeah, it is finally streamed there...My Sweet Home. :)

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this is really well developed in regards to the collaboration, it flows very well and maintains the main idea vividly. nice job. tighten up the grammar a little bit (surroundings, etc.) and you're golden.

Mag

many thanks for your nice comment and the heads up.
I am happy you like this one. It was great to have some collaborative
work with two gentlemen alike Ian and sir Wesley.

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great collaborative poetry - you worked well together and came up trumps. I ditto the above comments. :)

Love Mand xxxx

and many thanks for your lovely visit.
I am happy you like it. I am sure my friends
Ian and sir Wesley appreciate your nice comment as well.

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It has amazed me how well this shop's collaborative poetry has flowed.......stan

Though the poem is good...it did not give me that pastoral feel....having said that...this is just my personal opinion..even though the accomplished poets from the big league have given great comments...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Because of my bad beginning raj. I thought the same when many were hesitant to comment including the shop leader Lol.
I appreciate your honesty dear raj!
It's but what is expected from all.

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Please note that I didn't mean to be harsh...as I said it was my personal opinion...i agree that it gives a good feeling but I had expected much more when poets in the big league have teamed up like you, Ian and Wesley....so just let go of my opinion..don't think too much of it..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

As we defined it in this shop (which has made a Big expansion on the traditional definition which restricted it to just country settings) this poem left me with a good feeling.

There is SO much poetry written about things which are upsetting in nature, war, politics, violence and such that I think a single term needed to be used to describe that poetry which leaves a reader with a calm or good feeling. Talking about a happy home does this..............stan

This is too what I thought when you first explained the term in its new "dress", and since I have no real experience of what could a real country life look like, home was the first thing that came to my mind to give the feeling of peace.

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I didn't comment because I was one of the authors. Of course your idea was special which is why everyone liked it.

W. H. Snow

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