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My heart is a dungeon
Found in my chest.
If you look closely,
You will surely find prisoners.

My heart is a seal
Locked with different locks.
If you want to get into it,
You must pass through a lot of traps.

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Free verse
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I'm a fan of short and to the
point. You could work on this
one. First verse, last line loses
the rhythm;

you will surely find prisoners

easy fix, remove "surely"

Last verse the same and I'd
find a different word for the

thank you for posting

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Hello, thanks for the correction

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I would suggest expanding the thought of verse one and two a bit more the work feels unfinished
also may I suggest a more interesting and creative title as this is the first thing the reader sees .It invites the reader to the first line which you want to be strong so it pulls them into the poem

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

Hi there,

Thanks! I'll look into that.

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