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Mountains That Move

At first glance the ground shivers

the trees sway and lift with ease

the seas align with the pattern of the sun

and to know -

true gifts are given in revelations

among the hopeless there's a man

sitting with bars and rails

and thus he goes -

attempting to change the pulse of the ground

to exchange negotiations with man

so the thoughts can prevail with vengeance

and thy mighty hands can protrude through

to ask - 'can mountains be moved'

believe the tale of lions and wolves

give heart and take strain -

no vast level is possible beyond air

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I hope it's ok if I use the initials? A very warm welcome to Neopoet.
This is quite beautiful, with a couragous heart I think we can move mountains. Thought provoking too!

Thank you...Teddy

Thank you for the comment Teddy. And yes, it is ok to use initials. :)

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Looking forward to reading more of your work.

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Thank you. I am eager to post more.

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