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In the Mountains (Haibun)

At last I am among these great mountains surrounded by snow caps and clouds. Pungent green and blue valleys drink from melting waterfalls below. How many times I’ve flown above them, higher than any bird has known, as they appear like a spear with white veins gleaming in the sun to the wide rivers and lakes.

I pass my days at sea level, far from the sharp shadow of mountains, in the company of trees and living things,and the small stones on the carpeted earth. What is calling me here to feel this magnificence of rock? To feel the goodness of timelessness? To a memory which becomes part of me, like the first ocean sighting long ago, or the sunrise in the desert, or first time in a plane flying past the moon...

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Mountain Night

Remember the wind, the sound,
The whistling current of life force
And the crisp taste of air made thin.

How the stars at night exploded,
Touching the towering heights,
Filling the sky like a veil!

If nothing else, remember this.

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A Haibun is a Japanese form (Basho, 17th cent) which is a prose beginning and traditionally a haiku poem to follow. Haibuns in English (like Ashbury) do not follow any strict rules concerning the lenght of the prose or the style of poem used. The basic idea is to allow the prose to set up the poem. The prose becomes the concrete, the poem becomes the creative universe, as self contained poem. The prose will help explain how the poem evolved from the prompting of the prose. It is an insight into the creative process as well as showing two aspects of a narrative. I think it is a far superior idea the prose poem, which attempts to be both and is usually neither.
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Comments

a very apt form. I thought you've successfully make use of it on both levels, the prose and the poetry as well. I think I'm going to turn my last piece to this form as I'm not very happy with the introductory stanza. Thank you for sharing.

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'twill suit my kinda poetry ----prosaic and then purity
gem like as you oftener once did see

I loved this work, I felt like I got to have a 3 course meal of delicate flavour & real substantial nutrition. Thank you, partly for the pleasure of the clarity & ease of expression, not to mention the skill that made it flow so well, & partly for the content/subjects there-in. I wont go into it, but I have a passion for flying & a matching passion for forest etc. So this was a double treat for me.

Thank you also for the accompanying message, (dessert?) which added another layer of enjoyment in furthering my understanding/education.

So glad I found this one! Bravo, wonderful piece.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

thanks for your words. what a nice thing to say. #humbled.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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u skipped me
rather pole-vaulted
Emo
COZ i AM GROWING OLD?

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