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Moon Walking... Historical Figure [for June contest]

Submitted by Geezer on Wed, 2017-06-14 16:19

Neil Armstrong took a giant leap
and landed on the moon
An astronaut and hero
he won first place in the space race

I literally looked up to him
and wondered if he was scared
He didn't sound like he was
“One small step for man...”

The “Buzz” was there and they
walked and talked and
they rocked and rolled
doing the “space buggy”

I had almost forgotten the “Buzz”
Men that were out of this world
Damn, they were brave!
So far from earth, but home in our hearts

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft
Contest: 
Historical Figures.

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Ali Zonach

Wed, 2017-06-14 19:30

yes, those guys were the bravest, and it's good to read your tribute to those that rode those dangerous buckets. Nice flow to it--like a stream-lined rocket in flight. Much liked--no nits. Ali

Geezer

Thu, 2017-06-15 08:14

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I neglected to mention the third man on that mission, Michael Collins! The mostly forgotten member of the team. I actually had to search for him! Maybe I will write something about him. ~ Geezer.
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Esker

Wed, 2017-06-14 23:29

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mother was so excited
i had the poster of all of them standing on the moons surface
your poem is excellent
thank U Geezer!

mr wolf

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Thu, 2017-06-15 08:20

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to Ali, I actually had to look up the third man on that mission! The guy that stayed in the orbiter and waited for Neil and Buzz. I watched it too and was immensely proud that we, the United States had beaten the Russians there. Now, we are partners with the Russians on the International Space Station. I think that I may write something about him next. He was just as brave as the other two. Thank you for the read and comment, ~ Gee.
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Rula

Thu, 2017-06-15 09:36

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They sure made a difference in the human history.
Wish you the best.
I think you need to enter your poem under the cotest labled as "historical figure" instead of the "historical Vision"? Not sure though

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scribbler

Thu, 2017-06-15 17:13

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To set foot on another world. And to do it with computers which were less powerful than most of today's pocket calculators. WE did it and then...............nothing. That last frontier abandoned due to lack of interest. Enjoyed your poem......stan

lovedly

Thu, 2017-06-15 20:17

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stan
CHANGING HISTORY OF TIME
LESSONS FROM PILLARS OF TIME

Lord Rama... Be fair to the point of default, may be you may suffer, doesn't matter
Lord Krishna ... Tell the whole truth you need not remember what you last said
Gautama Buddha...Eliminate pain to reduce suffering
Jesus Christ...... Love thy neighbour
Mohammed..... Trust in Allah.
Gurnanak ji... The whole world is in trouble ''NANAK DUKHIYA SUBH SANSAAR.''
Mahatma Gandhi When one slaps you on one cheek, show him the other
My sole view............
''BELIEVE IN YOURSELF FIRST USE BRAINS on Earth...IN HEAVEN GOD WILL LOOK AFTER YOU''

Amen Ameen WAHE GURU, OM, HEY RAM ALLAH! BUDDHAM SHARNAM GUCHAAMI

Geezer

Sat, 2017-06-17 14:05

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While mothers may be important, unless yours was an important figure in history, you should enter something else. ~ Gee.
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wesley snow

Sat, 2017-06-17 14:40

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they had less than thirty seconds of fuel to do it with. Amazing that he did it manually.
Good choice.

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Geezer

Sun, 2017-06-18 20:23

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Yes, he was a true hero, he did what he had to do, when he had to do it. ~Gee.
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