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Moon Haiku
the moon's the closest
mankind can hope to get to
staring at the sun
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2019-03-19 13:28
and
the blindest caused
without a pause
is equal to
that of love
cheers,
Jess
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Geezer
Tue, 2019-03-19 14:55
Nice work...
Is this your first attempt at Haiku? ~ Geezer.
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Cloudthings
Wed, 2019-03-20 01:18
Love it
Second read it has even more to say, & that's good poetry.
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"
gregwa8
Thu, 2019-03-21 00:05
thanks everyone for the read
thanks everyone for the read and comments!