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Mog's Choice section 16

Drifting toward the murder scene
I sense a hot bar of emotions there
but one host has already left the scene
yet tastes are teeming everywhere.

But one person is two it seems
and thus has a more enticing flavor
a divided host with ragged seams
this is the one which I will favor

So I dive into his mind
and find his name is Annabel...
My eyes just can't stop watching the body
then they blur with fright and pain
and my true self is shoved aside
I feel that I have gone insane.

Some deamon is now in control
it makes me smile an evil smile
then sets me running after another
I catch up in less than a half mile..........

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I had already posted this and in my haste I hit preview then failed to hit save. Haste doesn't make waste , it makes stupid lol.......sorry for delay
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This is fine just change the heading number to 16 as 14 and 15 have just been used,
Mine will follow as 17, then loved 18 and I think Jess is coming in at 19, then we return to Wesley to start the rundown where some become caught lol.
Liked your write it rang out well, Take care out there, Yours Ian..

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

That's what I get for not checking whether my original had posted lol. Will change number now

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Is she/he the one? The one who killed our unknown victim? We shall see what the others do but I like this. I play the killer well..

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Waving a kerchief at a man will not take his head, it may move his heart, you are in for a surprise.
Where do I start there was no murder as such just a body passing through to take the place of one we knew.
Then to make the blame stick to that Mackwill who we will let the law kill LOL
Yours J Creel

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Going to be interesting to see where others go with Mog's choice

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I think you threw them a curved ball with young Mog, but it was great to be distracted by a mythical man that held such power according to stories I have heard, but in London they have two giants that are called Gog and Magog, a very interesting read I wonder if your Mog was a mutation of one of their off springs, these stories keep coming in LOL,
In the UK there are several cities that have Giants that protect them and there is a story from the Isle of Man where they found the remains of a man and woman and they were reckoned to be near 10 feet tall, so who knows, what goes on here..

The Salisbury Giant is a unique survival in this country. It is probable that he existed by the 1400s. Sometimes called St Christopher he was owned by the Tailor's Guild and purchased by the Museum in 1873 for 30 shillings (£1.50). He now stands 12ft high, his wooden frame having been rebuilt c. 1850. Over his shoulder he wears a leather baldric decorated with the Tailor's coat of arms.

His companion, the Hob-Nob, was the mischievous character who cavorted in front in the procession clearing the way for the Giant.
The original iron gate leading to the gallows of Newgate prison was used for decades in an alleyway in Buffalo, New York, USA and is currently housed in that city at Canisius College.
See you even have some of the history over there lol
Take care both of you and have a great day,
Yours, Ian

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Did Stan just create a new demon? That's how I read it. He possessed Anabel and found something already there, but it didn't seem to slow him down and he's still chasing Fitzroy. Did I read this right? Somebody fix me before my turn.

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Mog possessed Anabel in some form or fashion but then if you read Ian's, there was never really a murder, just a random dead body used to look like a murder, so this leads for some very interesting twists and turns concerning Anabel. I am just patiently waiting for my next go at this.

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Just a man who considers himself a woman, a new thing for Mog

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transvestic fetishism....always a head know I had to do something to make everyone gasp....

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Do you mean to say that Mog and Anable is one person? Or is Mog just interested in her in a way?

deamon... a typo?


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He is saying that Mog, whatever type of entity he is, chose Anabel to possess because she/he is different. A transvestic fetishist is not something even an entity sees every day so he decided to take her over and see what he could do with her.

Keep Writing,

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

a cosmic-joke on Mog! LOL ~ Gee

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Mog saw what appeared to be two minds within a single person. Annabel has two identities one a man and one a woman. Mog decided to take a two for one thinking the flavor might be both richer and unique. Also thought such a conflicted might might be controlled more easily and driven insane easier. And Mog LOVES the taste of newly insane mind

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