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modernization feat

my ignorance of self….. my desire to manifest ….the wisdom
which I have not …but profess
and
hope to throw teachings across the web… makes my face...red
and those who have me read… smile at my thoughts …all astound
As one goes round and around… they fetch a smirk upon frowns
with smiles galore… some laugh …some roll on the floor
till I have had my ravishing fill...I shan’t administer you…
with the desired pill...
But then it’s me they say… what of others can one display...
thoughts evoke an interest in some
many are ready with a packed up gun… someday …they will aim
but when will it happen … none know perhaps
yet the war surges within… the sands of time… devour all pain
and all kith and kin abandon… alas all life stands still… in vain
Yet we continue till the finale does end…

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
This piece of jargon is a consequence to all my personal experiences and interactions with all across the Internet on various sites ,particularly this one......... A unique venture in the prosaic-poetic form ...open for a volatile criticism ....A new venture off the cuff as usual..
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Comments

As per your last work:- Hells fire and Guy Fawkes memorial on this piece.
A pyrotechnic display on it's contents, also lots of awes and Ah's..
Now that's out of the way come on lets have some poetry from you, not about you, whoops that sounds a little severe, but come on, we know that you can write some good poetry, this was OK but about you too much. Can we have one of your other pieces, even of your pathway that is now, where you are with your thoughts, and have cut yourself off from us out here,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

on ENTICED

CEE uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu soon
laps under medication and madication.. hahahaha
i in mode of meditation...

loved

author comment

then your words will have more effect.

cheers,
Jess
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