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MISCHIEVOUS

Look who just stepped from the woods
the terror of the neighborhood.
Eight years old if he's a day
parents give him the last say

All the neighbor's kids beware
he pinches noses, pulls on hair.
Disagree? He'll give you a kick
his parents just don't give a lick
(He's not bad, he's just mischievous)

That song bird had best look out
his sling shot really packs a clout.
Misses the bird but not by far,
put a ding in nearby car
(He's not bad, he's just mischievous)

New painted fence across the street
he takes a stick, gives it a beat
clickety,clickety. clickety, clack!
back and forth and forth and back.
(he's not bad he's just mischievous)

Neighbor's cat goes walking by
he kicks it, I don't know why.
Cat will now have some sore ribs
caused by this monster wearing bibs.
(He's not bad he's just mischievous)

Well LOOK! A great big fire ant mound!
The first he's seen (he's from a big town)
Gives it a kick then just stands there.
I'd warn him but I just don't care.
( He's not bad he's just mischievous)

He takes a step then starts to race
look of surprise upon his face
crying as loudly as he can
his match just found by little man
(Who's not bad he's just mischievous)

I sit and watch him round the bend
searching for his torment's end
and from somewhere deep within
on my face appears a great big grin
(Those ants aren't bad they're just mischievous!)

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
an very oldie brought back from the site crash
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I think the line that goes "He give kick" should be: He'll give a kick. I'm not sure that I care for the lines of: [crying loudly as he can, his match just found by little man] by trying to "humanize" the ants, so that the lines rhyme.
Otherwise, good work and good for the little mischief-maker! ~ Geez.
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This is one of my earliest poems from before the site crash. The kick snafu is a typo . It has been corrected. Now the other 2 lines leave me divided. Should I leave this poem as is to display any progress I've made as a poet or go ahead and try to put any improvements in place? decision,decisions lol

author comment

maybe, [if you feel it would be helpful] make the improvements and note them in the comments section.~ ~ Geez.
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