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In The Middle of The Night...

Submitted by Geezer on Mon, 2021-07-05 15:12

Nightmares coming in single file
Black cats of Poe and hurts of the past
One-eyed and scared most of the while
Filled with fear; No, love doesn't last

Care thrown aside like his lost love
Monster of hate shows it's sad form
Push comes now, then the big shove
Frenzy of rage becoming the norm

The axe of power, smashing out life
Hiding the crime behind a wall
Found during a search, for the lost wife
The voice of a cat, brings his downfall

He writes down the crime, he does confess
Peace of mind, he wants for the grave
Ever the lonely, he wants to be blessed
From the Demon, he wants to be saved

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Structured: Western
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Been re-reading Poe!
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Editing - draft
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Ray Whitaker

Fri, 2021-09-24 20:27

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Sounds like the dreams ere chasing you with an ax

Strong feelings in this, thanks for posting it

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Geezer

Sat, 2021-09-25 08:53

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I was re-reading Poe and the story of "The Black Cat" and had a dream that night. Somehow, an ex-girlfriend, became the wife and I dreamt it from the perspective of a third-party, who had told me that, she was devastated that I had dumped her and put a wall between us. [I never spoke to her again]. She was undeserving of such treatment, for she had done nothing wrong and I guess that it bothered me more than I ever knew. [She is long dead, so the option of begging forgiveness is not possible.] ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

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