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The Mendicant

Submitted by Josephus on Mon, 2013-04-01 10:21

Fastidious

Starched shirt paisley tie
Both frayed
Worn with dignity

Suit shining witness
To countless years
Service

White silk handkerchief
Mottled as ancient cream

Shoes cracked
Polished to a glow

Meticulous

He is seminal
To the community

A profession
Of great regard
And universal need

His chambers
City Hall square

The town mendicant
Providing
Chance for giving
And receiving

Gratitude

Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Josephus

Mon, 2013-04-01 11:02

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As seen in passing through a small town

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

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loved

Mon, 2013-04-01 13:45

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the first quality needed
of a poet
to knead poetry of some lovely standard
and you are young
Neopoet

loved

Josephus

Mon, 2013-04-01 16:15

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Thank you for your encouragement

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

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loved

Mon, 2013-04-01 18:57

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so

loved

Geezer

Mon, 2013-04-01 22:16

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that you not only feel, but see too! Nice job, good work! ~ Gee

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Josephus

Thu, 2013-04-04 10:47

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Thanks for reading and taking an interest in my work.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

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Frenchf

Sat, 2013-04-06 15:01

And the barbers. especially the Italian Barber

Josephus

Sat, 2013-04-06 15:11

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I must confess, I know nothing of Sweeny Todd, but I'm grateful that you found the poem worthy of comment. Thanks and best regards,

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

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Seren

Sat, 2013-04-13 08:08

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The imagery is fantastic I loved where you took me,

Kudos

love JC x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Josephus

Sat, 2013-04-13 19:22

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Thanks, Jayne. Its great to hear you enjoy my work.

Fondly

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

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Ian.T

Sun, 2013-04-14 04:02

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If only all people could see while they are travelling around the byways of the world as you have done very well.
Ask people at work that have come in by car what they saw as they came to work, and watch the frown drive their memory to exhaustion as they say nothing out of the normal.
Maybe we should ask that lovely man to wave at them, Yours Ian.T

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