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Many Hats

Submitted by gregwa8 on Wed, 2018-08-01 00:04

when you wear
the artist's hat
your favorite sound
might be "splat!"

the splash of paint
upon the canvas
it doesn't have to
make you famous

there's joy in taking
what you feel
making imagination
real

to put "out there"
what's in your heart
that's the beauty
of making art

when you wear
sweatband or helmet
your muscles and your
mind are "on it"

giving everything
to score
that's what playing
the game is for

to be a part
of a bigger team
a section of
a bigger dream

it takes great skill
and motivation
and hopefully
congratulations

when you wear
a wig or crown
something dramatic's
going down

to memorize
all of your lines
show the world
your looks and spine

it takes real guts
to take the stage
and love as well
for the written page

most wear one cap
upon their skull
but some people
can wear them all

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Rula

Wed, 2018-08-01 01:29

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you said it all and you said it really well. Can't agree more.
Congrats!
You're a real artist .

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gregwa8

Wed, 2018-08-01 03:02

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thanks Rula!

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Geezer

Wed, 2018-08-01 13:13

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as it jibes with the theme, word usage likewise. I think that the pattern and rhyme are really good and you kept my interest all the way through. Just a itty bitty niggle at the end in the last stanza. This is how I can see those last lines: "but, there's some
can wear them all".

Just feel it makes the flow better and we already know that you are speaking of people, so it doesn't change the thought at all and still makes sense. Great work!
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raj

Wed, 2018-08-01 14:53

others have already commented before me about this good write...I suggest you may delete "people" in the penultimate line..try and see if it works for you...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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