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Make hay while the sun shines.(Very serious limerick)

There was a lot of people in jail
Many said they would never do well
They broke out one day
Just to make hay
Now the farmer thinks they are swell

La La Sparrow

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funny? I got a good chuckle out of it. ~ Gee

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but you are a very silly man (said with the greatest love), and the humour shines through.
Excellent limerick form.

cheers,
Jess
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does it
gel
with well and swell ???
course it must
bard is deaf
like hell
he may dwell

are you becoming bitter? This does not sound like your usual humour and kindness. Please listen to
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks
and try again.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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