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MADE OF LOVE

Submitted by JAY GBUGASON on Mon, 2017-05-15 04:11

A dove in the sky
Oh you fly high
Like tie and dye
You stain my heart
Here on earth there non like you

Let me into your hearts door
Though this man is poor
The priceless gift he bears is made of love
Receive my package
It is without age
Made of love, could last timeless
Limitless my feelings keep going

A gift for you today and tomorrow
Drop away all that could bring sorrow
For this is not borrowed
It’s yours as its ours
Hours on the clock don’t matter
Only makes this gift better

Made of love my heart yearns
to be touched by your love
a fire burns aflame as same consumes
what is made of love my heart,
my world and life made of love

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Last few words: 
FOR JUSTINA
Editing stage: 
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JAY GBUGASON

Mon, 2017-05-15 04:12

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for the love of my life

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Wed, 2017-05-17 22:35

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Welcome to Neopoet. This poem clearly shows the love you have for her. I never critique a poem by a new member but you might check the spelling here and there........stan

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