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Lost memories

I sincerely want
to remember you,

but every time I try,
I get only void,

then all my memories
are left
frameless.

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A message of few words,

That you want to remember someone
But they are hidden by emptiness
This can affect all memories
If the others are judged by this one.

I say:-
Remember all that cross your path,
as they all carry a message from your maker.
The lessons to be learned cannot be learned alone.
Though they are for you only
How can you measure the value of things if you walk alone.
Yours Ian.T
A good write in so few words well done..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You're absolutely right. Remembering what others teach you is the best way to remember them. Then they'll be always well remembered . Thanks for the enlightenment.

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A simple and elegant write...good job

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Thanks for dropping by and your kind words. Any suggestion for a better title would be appreciated.

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for interesting titles, you can use an online thesauras and for example, type in the word "memory." Synonyms will come up and perhaps one will strike you as an appropriate title. I use it all the time. Instead of using the word "visitor" for my one poem, I found "Visitant." Just a suggestion....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I wanted something like lost and found "futile" but didn't think it well fits with memory, does it?

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futile, your poem is elegant and simple, the title should be as well :)

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I shall keep it simple too! Thanks for the thoughts.

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:)

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

jumbled, lost, unsorted, un-displayed,
what a beautiful, powerful expression!

I love concise effective, affective poetry like this.

Not sure about the title. This poem is anything but sappy.
How about "Entropy"?

cheers,
Jess
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I like the word "Entropy" , a new one for me, yet it doesn't describe my memories
the way I want it. I admit I wasn't happy with sappy either that's why I would appreciate any alternative or I would however use one of the words you've used in your comment; "lost" or "unsorted" as they well fit there.

Appreciate the suggestion and the thoughts. Thank you.

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... in your collection (which I now have time to play with, by the way) this is beyond minimalist. It isn't my cup of tea, but I agree with Jess that it is succinct. Is it someone specific or fiction?

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I thought I could go with this before you could manage your pillows:)
This isn't fiction.There's always someone nice to awake my sleeping muse.

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a sonnet satisfy? :) I shall post one now and wish to hear your thoughts.

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I like the simplicity of this one! and I felt the frustration - very effective in getting the emotion across.

Well done.

Love Mand xxxxx

Thanks for the visit. Appreciated !!

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