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"Lost Ages" (September Contest )

Now this thing about losing stuff.
You know at my age, it is not enough
You cannot be other than joking.
Or of my age the micky you are poking.

If only I could just find my way around
Need a map for this house and surrounds.
Each day is a challenge to us old folks here
Where did I put it, as it just isn’t there?

Do you need a list, or shall I just mention a few
I hit my head on a beam, lost memory it seems
My glasses were on my head the other day
I searched to see where they had strayed.

Went to the toilet, as is a must each hour,
Took my clothes off, and had a shower.
The wife bless her asked me what I was doing
I just laughed at myself, just kept smiling.

I saw it, I did, and it was in my hands just now.
I just can’t remember, why I was wearing a frown
Damn it I must look, where are my glasses again?
I need them to find the things, nothing is the same.

Blessings to you all out there in your homes
I would come to see you but fear to roam
I lose my way here, in my home each day
I would go and do something, maybe just pray

But that to me is just another thing gone wrong
I can’t remember where my religion is gone
Not to worry out there of my state of mind
I will try to find the things I have left behind

Where is my house? Can you help little ole me?
It is a one storey, or maybe it is three?
I live some place, but have lost my way
This age thing, is just another tragedy.

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Maybe you need to change the title to "Don't follow me I'm lost too" :)
Much fun.
Enjoyed as always!

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I will think about a title change..
Thank you for popping in to see me, I remember your name so I am not that bad but many of the others well I need a memory list lol Take care and know we are there with you always..
Yours as always Ian, xx

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How about Senior Moments as a title? just a suggestion..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

a very humorous poem abut senior moments and it tells me that you haven't lost the power to write so pretty well...

best wishes for the contest...i see you haven't forgotten to mark it for the contest :)
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raj (sublime_ocean)

It was not written very well it is because I have "lost" some of my abilities for grammar and other things that I just can't recall.
Take care and my best to all there with you,
Yours, Ian ..

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good change in title Ian
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Many thanks for your confirmation on title change it helps us to go forward.
Hope you and your family are well,
Have a lovely weekend,
Yours as always, Ian ..

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I just laughed at myself, and just kept smiling.

I saw it, I did,

and it was in my hands
just now.....!!!!!!
it appears you are using spectacles
as a lovely metaphor
LOL nice way though
I wish the judge will hopefully
think so
am I the judge no
thank ur stars
I'd award the first prize
if only all laugh

I have had both my eyes sorted and only need spectacles for close up work, other wise my sight is 20/20.. It is great to watch TV without glasses, now I know how my lovely Mother felt at 94 when she could see better than me lol..
Take care young Bard and thanks for your visit,
Yours In ..

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then I will get a pair of new eyes
which I can take along
lol

I just bought some memory foam shoe insoles but still can't remember what I came into the kitchen for lol

At least your feet will remember where you are.
It's your brain that has to remember why you are there lol Have a great day ..

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Oh God, this rings true for most of us, but you have to laugh at the pitfalls of old age.
Obviously, your sense of humour is still intact.

Thank you for the laugh and long may you continue to titillate.
Obi.

Sorry cant recall you name or where you is from but will talk to you anyway and thank you for laughing at me as the others do.. The word tit i late rings a warning bell for me is it rude, Oh well have a great day out there, send money that's all I ask of anyone..
Yours, Sparrow, Ian or Yenti, cant recall which, so I put all of them down. lol

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nice rhyme on this one I am sure there are many of us that can identify with this write

OH ye of the hermits cave wall
greetings and thanks for your comment lol
Yours as always Ian ..

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