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As the fire burns down
the old man feeds it a log
then sits back and dreams

Long past days of youth
bring a quiet smile to his face
memories of her

He then remembers
and the smile melts like spring snow
loneliness takes hold

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
another shot at brevity in free verse
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There's a typo on stanza 3 line 3

(loneliness) takes hold.

Other than that, I have no comment. All's good.


I would have though spell checker to have caught that. appreciate the eagle eye.........stan

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a nice crisp poem combining warmth, fire, spring and love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

thanks for taking the time to read this little scribble.........stan

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Somehow I got an email about Neopoet in my inbox today and forgot my password. Suddenly remembered it and see you are here. Have missed you all and know that I think of you often. Hope everyone is fine. Still in college courses and have gone through the past year missing my father terribly. Hope to log in again soon and read some works.


Neopoet has been having tech problems recently ans sent out e-mails when site got back on line. I know losing one's father is a rough thing to endure. Drop by when you can.........stan

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