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Losing?

Submitted by raj on Mon, 2018-06-18 16:13

what is losing?
is it finite, infinite,
tangible, intangible
physical, metaphysical

or of something not found
as funny as spectacles on the head
thoughts, memories having no shape or sound

or those sunken feelings of
ignorance, misfortune
being a desert rose
a kid separated from mother

or that half finished coke
shared with a stranger
on the train?

don't curse, just smile
get rid of that stupid feeling
feel light, move on
put behind the lost baggage

your lost pen will find someone
to write poems found within

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Wed, 2018-06-20 03:31

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tackled such a difficult theme in such a way!!
I really like how effortlessly goes the flow.
I bet this pen won't lose its way.
Keep writing my friend.

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Sparrow

Wed, 2018-06-20 04:00

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Loved this one, it really put the loss fact into perspective, I could have, or I should have then all those times we didn't.
I hold onto the odd memory that is bolstered now and then and brought up to date what do we do then, I embrace the memory re invented and kept alive like someone loaning you that lost pen to scroll beaut words.
Love it, though don't do it, lol..

Yours Ian..

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raj

Wed, 2018-06-20 06:35

Thank you all for finding time to read this one. Good to know your thoughts on losing.
Means a lot to have comments on my write from guys like you from whose writes I have and will continue to learn...

regards...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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