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At a Long Lost Party

I yearned for another,
Who wasn’t you,
But she wasn’t there,
Unlike you,
At a long lost party
In old Cambridge town.

Did I fall
Just a little for you,
While longing for another,
Who wasn’t you,
At a long lost party
In old Cambridge town.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Hi Carl, what a wistful poem. I think the title, spacing and content are fine. You could put this to song and music. What form is it?
Enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I'm really pleased you like it; and yes, it would make a good song, I've not done that yet, but I should do. I've labelled it Free Verse.

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I like this because it's really different you have to unconfuse your thoughts when reading it to get the story, that's just my thought on it. Love this as a song. As we say in England a man's home is his castle and so is his women. I believe that settling for second best not an option as it's better to be alone than with the wrong person, who isn't right for one however is perfect for another. lol love that you have made me think.

Thank you...Teddy

...but so far, it's not, but should be, thank you, Teddy. I am so pleased you like this, and it has made you think. I do agree with you, but...I can remember there was something uniquely awful about leaving a party alone, or being alone following a party, although today, in the unlikely event I'd find myself at a party, I'd want to leave as soon as was even remotely polite!

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For me it was always attending a wedding alone that did it for me, but i do see what you mean about parties i remember my older sister always being popular and no one took notice of me.

Thank you...Teddy

Sorry to hear that, Teddy, but being popular only lasts as long as you are popular ;)

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