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Submitted by S.G. Blue on Tue, 2013-06-04 10:34

This.
And that you love me.
Even just that you are.

That you see softness and then it is.
That you lay down and I sleep.
That you are happy and so, I am.

You are.
And that you love me.
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Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not actively editing

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Shyanne18

Tue, 2013-06-04 11:58

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I think this poem is unique. I like the language. I do feel that is unfinished. Perhaps this work has something more to say..?

Shyanne

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weirdelf

Wed, 2013-06-05 00:05

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I don't feel the ring of truth in this poem.

There is some depth missing. Only you can tell us what it is.

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