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A Lifetime Mate

I love the tick tok in my ears
dance to its swing 'fore my eyes
wishing that it never does stop

no matter if it's day or night
it counts every moment pass by
like the pulse of my heart bytes

I sleep to the rhythm of its beats
watch it wave to me when I wake
feels so good to have this mate

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raj (sublime_ocean)

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"I love the tick tok in my ears
dance to its swing 'fore my eyes
wishing that it never does stop",
raj really good in the way you have written
well addressed in poetic charm"

Very excellent writing,
Mario Vitale

Mario Vitale

for your read and comment....good to know you liked it...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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Appreciate your reading and comment....good to know you liked it..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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Interesting. I love the imagery. To me it is that of a clock instead of the sea but I supposed to each, his/her own opinion. Love it.

Khalid

watces/clocks... Priceless and so is the time.
Very well "to show piece" indeed.
Two niggles if I may dear raj

no matter if it's day or [is] night

I sleep to the rhythm of [it's] beats. (its beats)
Other than that, I've enjoyed reading as always.

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for taking time to red and share your thoughts, opinion, perceptions and suggestions....means a lot ..apologies Mark for not acknowledging your time and comment..I stand corrected now..

regards...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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