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Leaders:

Prudent do not need retractions
Focused shun all irrelevance
Wise review and revise actions
Pragmatic strive for a balance

Bold do right heedless of pressure
Good have a moral foundation
Humble not obsessed by power
True walk the talk with clear vision

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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The only thing that makes me hesitate about regarding it as a gem of timeless wisdom is the line-
Pragmatic strive for a balance

I don't think that's what pragmatists basicly do. They seek what works best, with observable results.
If you agree with me then re-wording it to fit your structure and rhyme is your problem. [grins]
Good luck!

oh and I especially like that last line
True walk the talk with clear vision
That's a ripper!

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

It was weird hearing from your self after some time. I hope you are keeping well but seeing that you are now the managing director it looks like you are just flying past the rungs on the Neopoet corporate ladder.

I will clarify the use of Leaders Pragmatic Strive for a Balance - leaders who are pragmatic as far as possible do not engage in partisan squabbling but strive to bring consensus among the different groups / parties and that is where the strive for a Balance comes in. I hope that clears your doubts.

I would like to motivate you to compose, with calm and collected composure, a Haiku / Rhyku that can be safely read by all.

Cheers and congratulations on your prominent professional promotion.

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No rung climbers here, just poets and volunteers, if ladders are used it is to put out fires. [grins]

My silence is because I'm a lazy bastard and I find good critique as exhausting as composition, though at times just as rewarding.

Yeah, I get it now and perhaps this a gem of timeless wisdom after all.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Managing Directors, with Richard (themoonman)

You are being modest and too kind in your rating of my poem but I will take it as the ego needs positive reinforcement.

Cheers.

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