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The Last Time I Had Ice Cream
The last time I had ice cream
I sat on a park bench
overlooking the canal,
reading poetry and remembering
our favorite flavors.
Yours, Neapolitan.
Zealous and diverse
swirls of color melting
into a bowl-like palette,
much like painting
with a spoon.
Mine, Pistachio.
The creamiest,
smoothest
flavor imagined
with the most wonderful name -
Puh-STA-shee-oh.
I raised my eyes
to look over the water,
a small drop of luscious green
dissolved onto the page below.
Even e.e.cummings
knew nothing so sweet.
***
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I was reading "somewhere i have never traveled, gladly beyond" by e.e.cummings. :)
L
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Comments
Lavender
Mon, 2021-03-22 15:53
Hi, Teddy
This was a happy write. I imagine there is a beautiful Italian pronunciation for Pistachio that you hear more often. One of my favorite flavors and words!
Thank you, Teddy!
L
Lavender
Mon, 2021-03-22 16:34
I'm so glad!
Thank you, Teddy!
xxx
Arrow
Tue, 2021-03-23 21:44
I love this poem
especially the section about Neapolitan and the articulation of pistachio (although, I confess my least favorite flavor), and the vivid image of the melted green drop on the page. The only thought I have is the last two lines of stanza 4 seem unnecessary as the bowl-like palette already gives the painting image. Bittersweet!
Lavender
Wed, 2021-03-24 10:13
Hello, Arrow
I will think about those two lines. They were definitely supposed to help with the image of painting. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts!
L
c lynn brooks
Wed, 2021-03-24 16:49
lavender
this is just lovely and dream like
Chrys
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Lavender
Wed, 2021-03-24 17:57
Hello, Chrys
Thank you! I appreciate your kind words!
L
lovedly
Tue, 2022-08-09 15:42
I LOVE ice cream
but hate to say
last time
anytime is icecream tyme
pisssss-taaa .....sheee ooooooOOOOO
included
Lavender
Tue, 2022-08-09 17:03
Hi, Lovedly,
I agree, any time is ice cream time! I am vegan and Dairy Queen has a delicious plant-based ice cream bar. I treat myself every once in awhile!
Thank you for stopping by!
L
lovedly
Tue, 2022-08-09 18:01
ooooooooo la la la laaaaaaaaaa
I'll drop in some time
have plenty of
wow ice cream