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klaxon's holler

Submitted by Victorclaude on Sat, 2010-12-04 07:15

terrible wish that all will be fine
screaming in a foggy night
without a sound heard
by any ear
but the one in your head

a kind of madness
that sound begets
hardly delicate --
klaxon's shriek of awareness
sounding doom on one note only

sounded first on first day
plays
long through years
'til last day
in human ears

loudest at the end --
then silent
over -- it's over
silence gathers
gladly

omniscience
alive if not well
a starship traveling
infinity alone
to end and back again

torn -- trying to be whole
in cold of space --
can still be heard
klaxon's holler
mindlessly braying

on one note.

vcp

3 December 2010

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing

Comments

Victorclaude

Fri, 2010-12-10 17:36

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Ian,

I guess I don't see the complexity as you have, but that's ok, and understandable.

Thanks for the read.

Victor

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

Unknown (at least to me)

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weirdelf

Tue, 2015-01-06 08:59

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It has a powerful feel but I can't quite place where it needs work.
Memorable

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Kailashana2

Tue, 2015-01-06 07:29

Wonder where Victor is.

Mindless braying.... I do that too...

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