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The journey

In the garden of shrubs
where birds and insects gathers
In search of the rose that glitters
when a sun rise
it rises with a sunflower
which dances sheen for the sun
till it sleeps off.

An eagle is sitting with a shiny moon
when the skies plays
and when joy glimmers like a cluster
I will delightful sing a flourish melody
the appeal of my soul.

When foxes are crowded
I sight a blessing
(For who ever found love found life)
And I sigh with a bleeding heart for love.

Like ovules in ovary
And Honey in it's wax
So is my bride in my home
For a butterfly travels miles for it desire
So do I for mine
For a dance is just a step.

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This is a poem for a newly married couples that just fell in love,it serves as encouragement and strength to the both of them to love till death do them apart.
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your portrayal of romance and love. I see that you manage to get nature as your backdrop and as part of the "Earthly Delight". My favorite line? " A dance is just a step".
~ Geezer.

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