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intern

Interning only at life,
formed figure, out on the field,
Internalizing everything, never
look at me.

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Structured: Western
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Comments

your opening line would be better if you switched it around a little to say: "Only interning in life" ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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