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Ice Dream
I scream
You scream
We all scream
It is like something out of
Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
The dark side
Of sweets
The ice cream man
In a vampire costume
Daiquiris and diabetes
Children trampling each other
For Choco Tacos
Suburban whispering
“What’s the scoop?”
“Did you hear about the split?”
Can there be too much
Of a good thing?
Your tongue turning
Permanent colors?
Maybe, a killer brain freeze?
Do ice cream truck jingles
Ever warp
In your nightmares, too?
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Comments
fink555
Mon, 2018-06-11 02:20
Has
a macabre flavor to it, wow. Reminds me of the film "Phantasm".
gregwa8
Mon, 2018-06-11 04:05
looks like an interesting
looks like an interesting film! put out in 1979! the year of my birth
brittle light
Mon, 2018-06-11 03:15
witty and clever, also well
witty and clever, also well composed
that's plenty enough flavor for me to say
I like it almost as much mocha chocolate chip
an enjoyable delight
Al
gregwa8
Mon, 2018-06-11 04:07
thanks Al! mmm mocha cocolate
thanks Al! mmm mocha cocolate chip
fink555
Tue, 2018-06-12 01:53
Yes
BOOOYYYYY!