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Ice Dream

I scream
You scream
We all scream

It is like something out of
Charlie and the Chocolate Factory

The dark side
Of sweets

The ice cream man
In a vampire costume

Daiquiris and diabetes

Children trampling each other
For Choco Tacos

Suburban whispering
“What’s the scoop?”
“Did you hear about the split?”

Can there be too much
Of a good thing?
Your tongue turning
Permanent colors?
Maybe, a killer brain freeze?

Do ice cream truck jingles
Ever warp
In your nightmares, too?

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a macabre flavor to it, wow. Reminds me of the film "Phantasm".

looks like an interesting film! put out in 1979! the year of my birth

author comment

witty and clever, also well composed
that's plenty enough flavor for me to say
I like it almost as much mocha chocolate chip

an enjoyable delight

Al

thanks Al! mmm mocha cocolate chip

author comment

BOOOYYYYY!

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