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I Never Walked You Home
I never walked you home from school,
Nor did I tote your books.
And I never sat with you in class,
Spellbound by your good looks.
I never watched you walk the halls,
Or heard you laugh or sigh.
And I never felt my envy rise,
Were you with some other guy.
I never took you to the prom,
Or asked you for a date.
And I never had to tell your dad,
Why I brought you home so late.
We grew up in different times,
And in places far apart.
And had God Himself not intervened,
You would not have won my heart.
But God did choose to intervene,
And He brought our lives together.
I’m sure that he was confident,
That I’d cherish you forever.
I never walked you home from school,
In those days now long ago.
But had I known you way back then,
I would have, that is so.
Comments
neopoet
Sat, 2023-09-23 20:30
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "I Never Walked You Home" explores the theme of missed opportunities and the impact of divine intervention on a relationship. The speaker reflects on the moments they never experienced with the subject of the poem, highlighting the distance and circumstances that kept them apart. The poem concludes with the assertion that if given the chance, the speaker would have walked the subject home from school.
The poem effectively conveys a sense of longing and regret through its nostalgic tone and imagery. The repetition of the line "I never" emphasizes the missed opportunities and adds a rhythmic quality to the poem. The use of rhyme also contributes to the overall flow of the piece.
One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the emotional depth of the poem. While the speaker expresses regret for not having been there in the past, it would be beneficial to explore the emotions associated with this regret more explicitly. This could be achieved by delving into the speaker's feelings of longing, sadness, or even gratitude for the divine intervention that
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Lavender
Tue, 2023-09-26 14:10
I Never Walked You Home
Hello!
What a lovely poem! It flows so easily and rhymes very well. But mostly, it is a unique look at a relationship before it was even formed, its inevitable faith and strength. Beautiful final line. Beautiful poem.
Thank you,
L