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I Don't Want To Talk About It...

Razor-sharp questions
Scraping my fragile psyche
Bother, bother and bother
Can't you just leave me be?

I've tried to be nice
Do what you ask
Answer your queries
Be a good guy

You have disrupted my life
Given me ulcers
Made me re-live the agony
I've had to endure once already

Go away, go away, leave me alone
Don't poke me again
I don't want to be a monster
But I will scream invectives

Tremble in rage and spit on you
If you do not retreat
I've had enough
It's over

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
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Comments

surely catharsis is part of the reason we write. It sure is clear why you wrote this, we can feel the blood boiling. To me its more of a journal entry, a monologue, one which could be part of a sketch in a play. It allows the reader to act the part in anger.
But it exists in that one universe. To be more "poetic" will take time, as the anger has to be absorbed by the imagination so you will find symbols, images... to step back and explore the hurt, and come to terms with it, hide behind the poem a bit.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

feeling is just what I was looking for. I wanted express the anger, just the raw anger of helplessness.
I really wasn't concerned with pretty phrases and poetic flow and all that stuff. More poetic that way.
~ Gee.
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The same barrage of emotions I feel on a daily basis. I like the rawness of this. The flow ebs up and down like the emotions described. Good read.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I tried for the feeling of aloneness. I wanted to express the emotional turmoil that people have when trying so hard to give what is expected of them and not being able to let go and scream at the world.
Just leave me alone! Sometimes, when a person is always calm and serene, the rest of the world reacts with shock when a person just blows up and loses it! WTFIWWY? ~ Gee.
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Repressing our feelings is a method of self destruction but if we dare say how we feel, sometimes the judgment is worse than the emotion. You really summed it up.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

write one that follows the "Little White Lies" that we tell every day?
Call it "Lies and Other Methods of Survival"
Lol. ~ Gee.
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It would be a great and honest read

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Another strong write,
it is hard to be poetic when feelings are so acute.
I wonder where is a thin line between a poem and a short angry note? Does the form have to be beautiful when the content is about helpless rage?
When one is ready to write about it?

IRiz

you say leave me alone
I'd rather say
let me alone...
any way we reach the same destination

do find time to read my poetry
on LONELINESS
akin it may appear to be

When Lonely just Think of me

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