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i don't know

I don't know a part of me wants to be with someone
a part of me is also scared to get close
when is this hurting going to be done
even when its what I want most

I like you but I'm scared and I get nervous with you
I like how we have so much in common its like a shock
it's scary knowing someone new
but my heart is on a tight lock

I know I stare a lot but I like you so
not only because your really cute but also I love how we have an actual conversation
most of the time I feel so cold
at times I lose my concentration

you make me laugh it been awhile since someone I said I was worth something
I like being your friend others made me feel like I was nothing
even if we're not meant to be in the end

I try to tell myself I don't like you
you make me open up shows my emotions and it scares me
I don't know if you feel this way too
or maybe I don't want to see

I know where both are healing
sometimes I just can't stop this feeling

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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As far as connecting with me as a reader I found this very good. It is so evocative I think it must be real life. maybe that's what pulled me in. At the end I thought of the famous couplet by Tennyson:

I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it, when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all.

On the technical level it feels like prose to me; but I find content always most important. And your content capture me as a reader.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

with me too! I would call this prose, but not to worry, it shows your heart. This is a very good piece to show that special someone. I know that it can be scary to reveal yourself, open your being to another; especially after being hurt, but you never know until you extend that hand and try to touch another.
Sometimes, it doesn't go as you would like, but being a friend has it's benefits too. Welcome to Neopoet, and I hope that you will take advantage of the wealth of knowledge here, in our poets. I find I still learn from the rest of the community every time I log on to the site. I hope you find the voice you have inside you and don't forget, that all you have to do is ask if you have questions and someone will help you. Join any of the workshops you find interesting and enter the monthly contests. ~ Geezer.
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I don't know why you are not actively editing this because it has some nice language for the theme.
Perhaps you don't yet understand that editing is a big part of writing here on Neopoet?
Just click on the edit tab above your poem and read the form carefully.
In my opinion this really needs to be a rough draft :~)
Keep at it.
Later now,

~Mark~

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thank you so much on your feedback and I agree I need to edit certain things haven't really figured it out yet but im working on it

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my late poetess teacher gave me lots of dope
but I couldn't cope

so read my FREESTYLE
if it does please
it takes time to be a poet learn from the stalwarts above
baby girl
yes poetry wise @26
love after research
it hurts

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