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i don't know

I don't know a part of me wants to be with someone
a part of me is also scared to get close
when is this hurting going to be done
even when its what I want most

I like you but I'm scared and I get nervous with you
I like how we have so much in common its like a shock
it's scary knowing someone new
but my heart is on a tight lock

I know I stare a lot but I like you so
not only because your really cute but also I love how we have an actual conversation
most of the time I feel so cold
at times I lose my concentration

you make me laugh it been awhile since someone I said I was worth something
I like being your friend others made me feel like I was nothing
even if we're not meant to be in the end

I try to tell myself I don't like you
you make me open up shows my emotions and it scares me
I don't know if you feel this way too
or maybe I don't want to see

I know where both are healing
sometimes I just can't stop this feeling

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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As far as connecting with me as a reader I found this very good. It is so evocative I think it must be real life. maybe that's what pulled me in. At the end I thought of the famous couplet by Tennyson:

I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it, when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all.

On the technical level it feels like prose to me; but I find content always most important. And your content capture me as a reader.


The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

with me too! I would call this prose, but not to worry, it shows your heart. This is a very good piece to show that special someone. I know that it can be scary to reveal yourself, open your being to another; especially after being hurt, but you never know until you extend that hand and try to touch another.
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thank you so much on your feedback and I agree I need to edit certain things haven't really figured it out yet but im working on it

author comment

my late poetess teacher gave me lots of dope
but I couldn't cope

so read my FREESTYLE
if it does please
it takes time to be a poet learn from the stalwarts above
baby girl
yes poetry wise @26
love after research
it hurts

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