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I Am Woman
I am a woman
It's not my fault
I was born a paradox
sweet and soft and malleable
but armed,
with a brain as quick as a rabbit,
a tongue as sharp as a dagger
and a spirit that will not yield
Kill me, beat me, rape me,
you'll never, ever break me
I was born a woman,
a goddess in the womb
not a stallion born to be broken.
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weirdelf
Sat, 2012-02-18 01:16
Love this!
I adore empowerment in women.
One line bothers me
with a brain as quick as a rabbit,
rabbits are stupid,
Very well written, you wordcraft well
but that rabbit?They are more known for breeding, which does not equate with intelligence. Sure they are fast but not smart. It seems you equate intelligence with breeding. Tell me I an wrong.
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WonderGolly
Sat, 2012-02-18 07:34
Spirited Woman
nice piece of write flowing firm from start to finish. You'll make an influential Women Right Activate. lolz.
I like this lines:
Kill me, beat me, rape me,
you'll never, ever break me
I was born a woman,
a goddess in the womb
not a stallion born to be broken.
beautiful write.
respects
WonderGolly :)
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
Nordic cloud
Sat, 2012-02-18 10:29
This is wonderful stuff, go go go
The title and the first two lines had me laughing and excited,
and I was not disappointed by the rest either.
If we think of the rabbit in Alice through the Looking Glass then....?
Yours Ann of N.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
weirdelf
Mon, 2012-02-20 08:51
THANKS LONNIE
Despite our differences , perhaps we can work together
cheers,
Jess
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loved
Mon, 2012-02-20 03:28
I see Jess is abs right
Rabbits only sexualize,
they homoise
and
are downright stupid,
in intelligence naught
and
forever in sexual acts get caught.
The sex in rabbits
surpasses all
and
intelligence, you as a woman
too have after all.
Look around the world,
UK and India and indirectly America
are ruled by women
Sexual rape and body massage
are simple acts on their part
as men are born
with an external sword,
women hold the umbilical cord
loved
Ian.T
Mon, 2012-02-20 08:18
An excellent write the above
An excellent write the above have said it all, just think that a "Rapier" would be much better than a Rabbit, as it is such a sharp clean weapon to be used with caution, lol , Yours Ian.T
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