egospermo
Sperms don't pain
they help one gain ...
eat into your eggs domain
and then fatten you simple and plain
the ones you let go
down the drain
wasted lives
do stain
and when one is older than due
its late for good pregnancy
how I wish all knew..

so sperms and eggs mate
between 16 to 27
and see the child the world's best
and the loving
see how pain is soon
laid to rest
when the doc declares your child as best...

one problem, only one sperm fertilises an egg
(note spelling typo with fertalized - fertilized)

I actually liked the original a little better – imo there is too much explanation now
my suggestion for a tiny cull

'I am pregnant
... The sperm
that fertilized my egg
was of the world's endlessly growing
pains, woes and ills.
... Now the embryo grows bigger everyday,
and here I am,
after a few years
unable to deliver.
... this womb
shall explode one day'

as you know - just my opinion
love judy
xxx

Utterly courageous in pain and truth. I could wish I was a woman and could have written it myself, but can you believe I utterly relate to it?
I do.

has spoken .
Period
feel happy at that .
Period
I commented again too.
Period

I DO UNDERSTAND

THE PANGS............

I connected with your poem in a large way. A play on the anxiety that something you can't monitor growing inside you and the potential that
what emerges may be something 'other'. Very nice, a touchy subject I rarely see touched. A brave and effective work.

Ron

A very thoughtful write and much more acceptable than some of the rants I have read, Well done , Yours Ian.T