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How lovely She Awaits - 3 Haiku suite

'sweet dreams', she purrs
I roll over and tremble
thoughts of losing her

even in unveiled sadness
her beauty incites tears
I cry twice

bearing now this
loneliness 10,000 days
an old man in love

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Very good. I was just a little disappointed in the last one, because the first two lines, seemed as though they could not exist without each other. Just my opinion, ~ Gee

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Very nicely woven, isn't it strange how a succession of work actually belongs together? I love when that happens.


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