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How lovely She Awaits - 3 Haiku suite

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'sweet dreams', she purrs
I roll over and tremble
thoughts of losing her

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even in unveiled sadness
her beauty incites tears
I cry twice

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bearing now this
loneliness 10,000 days
an old man in love

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Structured: Eastern
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Very good. I was just a little disappointed in the last one, because the first two lines, seemed as though they could not exist without each other. Just my opinion, ~ Gee

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Very nicely woven, isn't it strange how a succession of work actually belongs together? I love when that happens.

~A

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