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Her Gaze
Her gaze is fixed
on a thing of love
and I may admire
unobserved
her lovely face
may see it radiate
a soft glow of light!
And all those things
which I may neither
touch or know
broils within me...
Spirit distilled by soul
and at last
my love knows words,
both silent and whole.
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Comments
raj
Sun, 2018-05-13 05:29
hi tyro
to me, in this poem the words flow in an ethereal matrix...
some wow lines for me in your poem are:
spirit distilled by soul..
and at last
my love knows words,
both silent and whole.
a pleasure read tyro...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Simon
Mon, 2018-05-14 08:24
Tyro
The way you have poured out your feelings just got me imaging how physically might look, nevertheless a male animal doesn't scrime for nothing there must be something biting him. I like it any way thanks.
Rula
Mon, 2018-05-14 09:25
Hello tyro
seems it's only me not to get the first stanza especially "fixed on a thing of love"
However I read with awe the line
"Spirit distilled by soul"
and the last closing couplet.
Enjoyed
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tyro
Mon, 2018-05-14 14:32
Thank you raj
Thank you raj
this one happen to be a favorite of mine .
"the words flow in an ethereal matrix..." this is quite a compliment, and appreciated.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commentraj
Mon, 2018-05-14 14:36
That line tyro just spilled
That line tyro just spilled out of me after reading through your lovely poem and truly expresses my spontaneous reaction
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raj (sublime_ocean)
tyro
Mon, 2018-05-14 14:33
Thanks Simon,
Thanks Simon,
This one did come from my heart, and not my head.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commenttyro
Mon, 2018-05-14 14:41
Hello dear Rula,
Hello dear Rula,
Imagine your child is playing with a favorite toy, or something that is very dear; and is so engrossed in the activity they notice nothing else. But you setting across the room my observe the love flowing from his or her eyes. the subject of this poem is my lovely daughter.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commentraj
Mon, 2018-05-14 14:49
Butting in to say
that's why I love daughters who inspire poetry in such pure form...
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raj (sublime_ocean)