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He Dares Her
Holding close against her cheek.
he tempts, taunts, teases, tries, her fickle nature.
He dares her catch him at his flirting glance,
capture him within the fullness of her smile,
contain him motionless within her grasp.
She lets herself be used but never tamed.
So back and forth for hours play he and she their game,
the sailor and his mistress wind.
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Ian.T
Mon, 2012-09-24 03:33
CJ
Playing with the wind are we?? Beautifully written and packed in many hours of play, some of which could be termed as plain sailing but others as wooing.
Loved it, Yours Ian.T
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So find more reasons to believe in others..
captjack
Tue, 2012-09-25 20:31
He Dares Her
Hi Ian.T,
Thanks for the read and comments. I had fun writing this one. I'm glad you liked it.
CJ
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