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HAUNTED BY HINDSIGHT

This trail I have been on so long
has carried me through forests and fen.
Sometime the turns I took were wrong
but I always regained this path again.

All the people I met on my way,
affected by the tracks I left behind,
until this late but present day
still linger in my troubled mind.

Though I intended naught but well
Some, in retrospect, were hurt by me.
It's upon those wronged that I now dwell.
Ghosts of mistakes won't let me be.

One more hill now blocks my way
and it's lined by those as yet unmet
some of whom I'll meet today.
Will their meeting me bring them regret?

I sigh for lack of clear foresight
as I face another unknown day
but hope today I'll get things right
and leave joy and love along my way.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

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So I'm shoveling it on deep huh? lol. Always good to see you dropped by

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Touching, the words, the feelings invoked, the strength it took to share this piece.

Some pieces I hold in reserve... i believe this would have kept it close -had I written it. Thank you for bringing it to view!

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If a poet can'r share himself who can? Appreciate your dropping by

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with such a true moral lesson and such sweet sorrow.
The only issue I have with it is that the beginning is so beautiful and flows so well, but the last three verses, while containing great ideas, just don't flow nearly as poetically as the preceding. I would recommend taking those and trying to rewrite them with the same ideas but from a different approach. :)
I adore the first stanza. Especially these lines: "Sometimes the turns I took were wrong/but I always attained this path again" had me nodding with heartfelt agreement.

"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

Not to worry. I usually post stuff that's pretty raw then do gradual edits over time. Thank you for your visit and input

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