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Growing up to be a Woman [A Quatern for Women's Day]

You're a blessing in every form
a cuddly creature, thumb in mouth
wobbly feet doing rock n roll
to clap and cheer of those around

doted daughter for favorite dad
you're a blessing in every form
for mom who perms your girly curls
all do fancy your loving hugs

Growing up soon in sweet sixteen
your youthful charm truly pristine
you're a blessing in every form
all Tom cats have a crush on you

When two hearts start to beat as one
it's time to wear you wedding gown
for your man who takes sacred vows
you're a blessing in every form

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Happy Women's Day!!

Have a fabulous day,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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An awesome dedication from a gentleman like you indeed Raj.
You make me feel proud to be a woman. I'm.
Thank you.

PS. not sure about "doted daughter" [doting?] maybe...Not sure .. let's see what others should say.

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Thanks for the visit and read. You surely have every reason to be proud, every day, women's day is just an excuse :)

as for doted and doting I will wait to listen to other's shout...fortunately both are having 2 syllables ..lol

have a fabulous day...a good opportunity for every woman to claim a gift from her man...lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I am Director of the Mentor Program and for the time you were in the shop you were my student, so consider this a trip to the principal's office.
You complained in the workshop that you could not understand anapest much less join the two meters.
Then you write this.
Scan it if you dare. It is a catalytic mixture of iamb and anapest. It is, in other words, exercise three.
I think you need to stick around for Part Two and if nothing else listen and comment. You will learn something new.
Excellent poem. Metrically imaginative.

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Thanks for the visit and your comment. Obviously I can't turn down the summons of the Principal so will head back to the Meter WS soon.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I wont comment on the form as its one I have never been very successful with but its a beautiful tribute to all women everywhere, beautifully done with your imitable style

love and biggest hugs Jayne

p.s. its lovely to read you all again

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

So good to hear from you. I appreciate your taking the time to visit. Your words of appreciation are like tonic. Hope you are getting better by the day. Take best care.

Much love and hugs..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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