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Good Friday?
I wonder if that morning
was dreary and overcast
like today.
And I try not to make things,
see things,
focus on things
as if they relate to my situation.
I'm not sure they could.
Right now,
everything leads me 'round back again
to the same fights and fears,
and the same lies lies lies.
I question myself,
I question every little thing.
What I wouldn't give
for a bit of peace;
for you,
for our son and our daughter,
and the shattered life I had to destroy.
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Comments
Esker
Tue, 2016-09-20 01:30
oppenhiemer said it best
his family working away
once the destruction in
its mastery convinced
he was let go.
reducted
life is such
once we reach
our goal/s
Thank U!